srry boys, but i don't htink you wouild get this. you could still read it and tell me how it is
this was meant for girls
that's how my poems are

Winter's Love

you walking down a lonely road
whenever you try to look up, the snow keeps landing on your eyelashes
you can't see through the blury snow
suddenly a gust of wind blows off you white jacket
it disappears into the snow
your blue jeans and white sweater get covered in snow
the snow keeps going on your hair
you start to feel colder and colder
the chill runs down your back
you wrap yourself around your own arms
suddenly i come from behind, take off my big jacket and put it on us both
the coldness just disappears from your body
the snow in your hair becomes hot water and the snow on your body melts right off you
i put my arm around you so you stay warm
so we walk down that road together
and when we walk, you leave your beautiful scent and warmth in the air

so what do you guys think?>
i usually write my poems for someone speacial and put my feelings
that's 1 out of 8 poems i've writtten you guys have heard.
please comment and rate if you like

wow,.. O.o

I said it in msn and I'll say it again: fantastic ^^

it's really good, .. O.o

AAAWWWW!! so cute!!
your poem had a suttle but emotive tone, and sweet theme.
post more!!

thnx siria, its greatly appreciated.
what do you mean saber by suttle?
i'll post more later on saber
don't worry, i have 7 more to post

nice and romantic like,i love it
^^

It's sensitve and sweet Ur sensitve and sweet what more can I say

wow. thats deep.

I think it's important to note that the focus of any poem is obviously a personal thing, often the poet or poetess will direct it at a certain theme. Nonetheless, I think common physical experiences are recognizable to all... such as in this where mere sensory experience can... appeal I suppose to both male and female, whereas the emotions put behind it seem specifically female, yet I don't believe that has to be the case. Could it be a guy walking and a girl doing the same?
With just a few word changes, that could be the case.

One thing to look out for,
be careful of 2nd person attitudes, because you could literally mean 'you' or one of 'us'..whereas you switch to 'we' at the end where you directly refer to yourself (or the speaker more correctly). However, this 2nd person perspective can get cumbersome* (tired).

As a matter of fact, I always like looking up on a snowy day. very peaceful.

Good imagry throughout, though I could stand a clearer rhythm for the nature of this.

Not bad, keep working with technique.

yea i'll try to
but i got more poems and they all turned out better than this poem
so yea
i'm not gonna post those ones just for many reasons which i'm not gonna say. thanks for the advice though

Very cute, reminds me..... of me and sasuke!!! lol jk. very sweet.

ahhh very nice poem
it puts myself in that position...
the warmth, the love, the enviorment
a warm feeling