Just sifting through darknes
disfigured and heartless
living at night
hidden from sight
an ugly child
hair twisted wild
wicked thoughts
Dried skin rots
sickening face
braindamaged disgrace
A dead soul
never completely whole
unknown and scared
bleeding, who cared
a hearT punctured
a life tortured
a body dismantled
crazy and unhandled
a wild beast set free
always trying to flee
wonderously amazing
but not worth saving
death is the last path
time for the devils wrath


2nd one )

I am filled with sadness
in a world of madness
pushing past the badness
demon you cant have this
im getting sick as hell
They're breaking through my shell
pushing, even tho i fell
im an enchanted spell
Im dazed and confused
Am i just being used
my body is abused
its broken and bruised
i cant take all this pain
its making me insane
give me a gun i wont refrain
from BLOWING OUT MY F*CKING BRAIN


prolly only ones i will write

Actually, I liked it. I thought it was awesome.

thanks alot Dox
i kinda didnt wanna post but today i dont really care

Nice I really like it Kai

thanks hinata LOL

almost forgot i wrote this since i took a nice nap haha

cool that's great poetry..
all rhymes... like Awesome!

dude, your way better then I am....I liked it. it was awesome.

Thanks all

gotta do a new one lol



I am filled with sadness
in a world of madness
pushing past the badness
demon you cant have this
im getting sick as hell
They're breaking through my shell
pushing, even tho i fell
im an enchanted spell
Im dazed and confused
Am i just being used
my body is abused
its broken and bruised
i cant take all this pain
its making me insane
give me a gun i wont refrain
from BLOWING OUT MY F*CKING BRAIN




i thoroughly enjoyed that ending lol

didnt match the scheme but it ended nicely

LOL that's how you ended it? XD omg....

I think that's pretty awesome, its different!!

lol

different

explain XD

and ya

i like the ending
i love just freaking changing things up
you know?

cant touch this

lol, I know what you mean

different, meaning no one else has done it before, form what I've seen
Different meaning good XD

sounded more like a rap than anything else, but I still really liked it. You've definitely got some talent.

haha

para
cuz there is always a beat in my head when i write poems

XD

Much better than I could do. I suck at all things when it comes to writing. I'll stick with my numbers.

ohh pretty cool and god poems Kai like them !!!!!

That was AWSOME!!!!!! it made me feel human again... JK. Seariously someone should have a poetry-off in here. You might win... or someone could pull something unexpectedly *COUGHMECOUGHJKCOUGH* yeah....

HAHAA!

thanks man

XD

dunno about writing more
kind alazy right
and i dont like poetry most of the time
X:P

i iked em bothe

thanks alot kat

Why the hell was a smiley after the words "2nd one"? but watever it was pretty good

LOl

cuz i luv to use smileys

haha
and i didnt intend to write anotha one
since im lazy

Very good. I liked the first one better...in my opinion it has a better flow to it then the second one...but then again..it is 4 am over here and i'm kinda tired. I'll read it again sometime...when i'm not being an insomniac

first one 10/10

second one 9/10

wow after reading those
it feels like i could never write any like that again xD
even if i tried right now i couldnt come close
those feel like someone else wrote them haha