Hotagi101
Mar 9 2007, 10:31 PM
ok im doing this so i dont clutter this place up wit my poems and im going to ask all poets do the same plz (especially little hinata, kasumi hitomi, paradox, and whtfog) so that i can read them finally during my absece lolz well here they are:
sweet memories:
I slowly close my eyes
Remembering everything was just fine
The way you smile, cry, and blush
The things i loved so much
I remember that beautiful day
You told me to go away
You were beatin up by some boys
Like you were some cheap toy
I punched away their pride, and glory
Till finally they said sorry
You've clung to me ever since then
Like you were one of my own kin
Annoying, stupid, dumb were the words i thought
When it was only me the one you sought
But as the tough years went by
You were alway by my side
I remember how i sighed
When you kissed me for the first time
We giggled, kiss, and hugged
As i protected my only love
Then that fateful day went by
As i laid in my bed and cried
Then i remembered what you said to me
You said no matter what happens, you'll always be with me
why'd you leave:
Why did you leave me with all this pain
As I whisper your name in the rain
Your face I wish I could see
As you walk here beside me
Ever since you left, ive lost my faith
My heart fills with nothing but hate
Every night I got on my knees and prayed
But he took you anyway
As I cook dinner for one
I start to cry when I see the setting sun
Because now everyday at eight
Ill never be able to see your beautiful face
I lay on my bed trying to sleep
As my tears leak with grieve
Before you died you said ‘I love you’
I griped your hand and said ‘I love you too’
pain is for ever:
Im speeding down a road
Shivering cause the wind is so cold
Speeding so i can drown my misery
As i remember that painful memory
I came home early to surprise you
I always knew
But the truth was still hard to see
As i walked on you making love to someone besides me
You stopped breathing
When you saw me leaving
Grabbing my arm, sobbing and crying
Saying you were sorry, but i thought you were lying
I start to cry, feeling like a fool
As i start to loose control
I run off the bridge, dodging a car
As i fall into the dark
Im speeding down a road
Shivering cause the wind is so cold
Speeding so i can drown my misery
As i remember that painful memory
your gone:
i tell them your not dead
as i walk up to your bed
your face i touch
waiting for that smile i love so much
as i feel that your so cold
i start to hug you from head to toe
they pat my back saying there sorry
i just look at them like their retarded
their faces i start to pound
as they slowly put you in the ground
i start yelling there talking rummage
as your dad punched me in the stomach
a nightmare it would seem
as i awoke wishing it was a dream
i look around for your bed
then sorrow soaked in as i realized you are dead
black sheep:
My heart start’s to swell with pain
As they push me into the rain
I don’t know why I still care
When they start to glare
Once again, I was pushed aside
As everyone else got a ride
You said you were sorry, but I knew you were lying
As I came to the family party uninvited
I was the one punished
Because I got jumped by my cousins
My mom starts to cry with me
Saying she’s sorry, there only punishing me because of her history
Slowly my pain starts to fade
As it is replaced rage
How dare they hurt my mom
The only one that hugged me when I started to sob
I trained hard, getting stronger
As i started to take my first step into becoming a monster
Now i was the one smiling every night
As i started to send my cousins to the hospital, after a fight
Their hate started turn into fear
Running every time i came near
Every time they put fear on a face, it would be me they would see
At least i gave them a reason to hate me
so close:
I walk down this hallway
that seem to have no doors
looking for you
the one that i adore
i finally come upon a door
but im afraid whats on the other side
i slowly open and look
and fell to my knees and cry
your with him again
the one that makes you laugh
the one that knows you
the one that can calm your wrath
i stay in the distance
wishing it was me
as he kisses you
whats this feeling i start to feel, is it jealousy
i have dreams
torturing him alive
i was about to do it
but then i stop, why
i look at the pathetic man in front of me
he starts to plead, with his voice all raspy
he starts to tick me off
but then i think, this guy makes you happy
i let him free
telling him to go
not knowing who i am
but i think he knows
slowly i start to fade
into the darkness from which i came
never entering you life again
cause our love could never be the same
insecurity:
Im on the verge of insanity
Yet noone wants to help me
Im I too skinny, or am I to fat
Give me a chance, I can change all that
I look in the mirror in disgust
As my real face turns into dust
The mirror I break
As I see the face that I hate
All the girls laugh and sneer
As they make fun of my hair
I run to the bathroom, and start to cry
Why cant I be beautiful why
Tonight im going to ease the pain
As I take the razor from which it hanged
As I slit my wrist, appeared a long red mark
Then I slowly fell into the dark
society:
disgusted i start to look around
men have changed into hounds
never happy with their lives
as they beat their wives
kids are disrespectful, every word is a lie
as they use over the counter drugs to get high
doing stupid things, cause their friends dare them
where were their friends, as there world become dim
im disappointed, his words were so touching
as realize Martin Luther Kings work was for nothing
goverment says racism is over, thinking they were clever
please racism is worst than ever
murderers are on the rise
as kids are locked up to survive
a mother starts to cry, when she awakens
as from her house, her little girl was taken
fake religion has been made
as people turn to it in fear, to be saved
freedom is something they never tasted
as their lives are wasted
what is this hell you might ask
as you see these things nightly
thats whats funny, this is society
my mask:
i hate you, i hope your death isn't fast
because of you i have this mask
the real me people cant see
because theres nothing left of me
laughter, joy, peace, security is what they think they know
but on the inside is really tears,sadness,chaos, and sorrow
i just laugh and shake my head when people talk about religion
what kind of god would do this to me and why what was my sin
im sick, and i wish i could die
i saw my mother get brutally killed and i didnt even cry
i could have let justice do its thing that night
but through this i saw a flicker of light
tonight it ends
tonight i'll kill my own kin
tonight i'll kill the creator
but tonight ill also kill the monster
k also this can be like a lounge like at coffe shops i go to, you can talk about my poems why you like them, did i give you ideas and what not lolz and you can even bug me for coming out a new one lolz
Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 9 2007, 10:36 PM
Nice idea, I actually thought about doing it, but was too lazy....
*sigh* no I HAVE to
Hotagi101
Mar 9 2007, 10:39 PM
lol up

, and curse you vio for changing bb codes >.< how do i use the spoiler tags now lolz
Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 9 2007, 10:41 PM
Lol. XD btw, checked your PMs lately?
Hotagi101
Mar 9 2007, 10:43 PM
*gasp* well its your fault for killing bob2 lolz srry
little hinata
Mar 9 2007, 10:47 PM

I can't remember spoilers
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HI
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Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 9 2007, 10:49 PM
I thought you got a new assistant! and you know you hated bob2!!
Hotagi101
Mar 9 2007, 10:50 PM

dont cry there not working anymore anyways vio changed the bb codes
little hinata
Mar 9 2007, 11:54 PM
LOLZ OMG mimori DIED
Well actaully I changed My Desktop so I can't remember anyone but Hiriko and Mimori
Hotagi101
Mar 10 2007, 11:42 AM
?????? who are they again
Hotagi101
Mar 10 2007, 05:11 PM
this is dedicated to sama bear ^.^
My reason
When i would cry from pain
my sorrow you were able to tame
when ever i fell into the slumps
you were always there to help me back up
i kept my heart locked away
but you were able to unlock it anway
now im free from the cage like a dove
as you flood my heart with your love
nobody touched me, they did not dare
because if they did you would be there
when im alone im weak and wrong
but together we stand righteous, and strong
this is why i love you
this is why i need you
people wonder if living has any reason
i nod, and smile cause your my reason
yay for me i wrote a sweet poem ^.^ didnt know i had it in me lol well there it is ^.^
little hinata
Mar 10 2007, 06:23 PM
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
*hugs*
kingkaing
Mar 10 2007, 07:02 PM
great poems although i only read the first two, its just too much reading for me, but they are good
i wish i could write poems, i have no writing skills at all
Paradox886
Mar 10 2007, 07:10 PM
My Reason was very sweet poem. Had depth, honesty, and meaning behind it. The topic and the idea have been extremely overused, but it came from your heart, and that's all that really should matter.
Hotagi101
Mar 10 2007, 07:44 PM
*sigh* this is happening and im hating it, before i left i asked my friend who is an awesome poet wats wrong with me and showed her my old work compared to my new and she laughed and said it happens to everyone and i put on a confused look and she laughed again saying that give it time, dont force it and well as you can see i didnt listen to her ive been forcing it trying to break it but nothing,zip, notta.So im going to try her advice so this will be my last poems for a looooooooooong time lolz or till i get my writing spirit up or whatever is wrong with me lol
Paradox886
Mar 10 2007, 11:38 PM
Yeah, when you first start writing poetry, you have a life time of experience to draw from. Than you start writing like a poem a day, and soon all that experience is used up. You just have to wait until you acquire more fuel for your poems. Wait until you feel inspired again. And if it doesn't happen for a year or so, you can force it and you should come up with good poetry again because you've got a year full of emotion that has yet to be expressed in that way. That's the way I look at it anyway
Hotagi101
Mar 11 2007, 12:51 AM
thanks para, if i didnt know anybetter id think you were a philosphere in real life ^.^
Paradox886
Mar 11 2007, 11:06 AM
QUOTE(Hotagi101 @ Mar 11 2007, 12:51 AM) [snapback]396479[/snapback]
thanks para, if i didnt know anybetter id think you were a philosphere in real life ^.^
Define philosopher, lol. I haven't gone to school for it or anything, but I do have an interest in philosophy and do debate several things with my friends. I enjoy the mental stimulation. I've read several religious texts, and am familiar with most religions. I've read Plato, and I have a good understanding of psychology which I've picked up from my favorite hobby of watching other people interact. I'm in tune with the emotions of others, so it is usually easy for me to understand where someone else is coming from. I also have a very strong sense of logic (I need one to balance out my strong sense of emotional empathy or it'd get me in trouble). If you know anything about or believe in astrology at all (I have no definite opinion on it, but if there is no truth behind it then there are some very disturbing coincidences in my life, for example, all my friends are Leos), I was born on a cusp. I'm a Leo with a Virgo leaning. It mixes pride with sympathy and understand, fierce physical ability and desire with a caring gentle purity. So I guess I'd consider myself an amateur philosopher.
little hinata
Mar 11 2007, 12:35 PM
lolz guys
Matty please IM me
Hotagi101
Mar 16 2007, 09:04 PM
...well here is a poem....brit brit just rate plz dotn say anything plz
RAG DOLL:
I feel like your rag doll
you make me feel so small
i sit high up on the shelf
why do i torture myself
you only take me down
when hes not around
happy, and joy you make me feel
as my heart you start to steal
you tell me things that i think are true
but when he comes back, im up on the shelf again sad and confused
when he kisses you, you giggle and snear
seeing this make my eyes start to tear
i would probably be better off in the rain
but yet i sit through this pain
and ill stay on this shelf for who know how long
and be played with when hes gone
Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 16 2007, 09:06 PM
10/10
^_^
Hotagi101
Mar 16 2007, 09:08 PM
lol thxs brit brit ^.^
Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 16 2007, 09:11 PM
your welcome!
little hinata
Mar 23 2007, 08:19 PM
10/10 lolz I like it lots of emotion
Paradox886
Mar 24 2007, 09:05 AM
QUOTE(Hotagi101 @ Mar 16 2007, 09:04 PM) [snapback]400695[/snapback]
...well here is a poem....brit brit just rate plz dotn say anything plz
RAG DOLL:
I feel like your rag doll
you make me feel so small
i sit high up on the shelf
why do i torture myself
you only take me down
when hes not around
happy, and joy you make me feel
as my heart you start to steal
you tell me things that i think are true
but when he comes back, im up on the shelf again sad and confused
when he kisses you, you giggle and snear
seeing this make my eyes start to tear
i would probably be better off in the rain
but yet i sit through this pain
and ill stay on this shelf for who know how long
and be played with when hes gone
Bad News: form was off. "on the shelf" is a fairly trite expression and using it repeatedly doesn't work well. I didn't really see much artisitic expression in "better off in the rain" other than to rhyme with "pain".
Good News: the overall message and purpose behind the poem was good. Nice rhyme pattern.
Overall: not your best, but fairly decent. You're capable of much better though. It's a little less than what I usually see from you, 6/10 (10 being the best I know you're capable of, 1 being if you were to write complete junk)
Hotagi101
Mar 24 2007, 04:31 PM
XD i know T.T i did it again T.T lol it seems i just cant except the fact that im running dry of emotion o.O
Kasumi_Hitomi
Mar 24 2007, 04:51 PM
welcome to my world
Hotagi101
Mar 26 2007, 12:37 AM
The dark
Im running down a endless hallway out of breath
the light illuminates my eyes as they show the fear of death
suddenly i start to slow as my bones start to raddle
but yet i keep running to fight this useless battle
i keep putting up walls in hopes to stop it
but it still moves toward me like a poisen mist
i made a mask to hide my identity
but once again it found me, taking away my serenity
i stop running, giving up as i realize there is no more light
i start to choke as im suffercated in the endless darkness,
only good i see is that i dont have to fight
my breathing starts to slow, realizing my fears
the only thing i can feel are my tears
just before i slipped into the eternal abyss
i see a bright light that i o so missed
slowly it kept getting brighter, as i hear a beautiful song
then the darkness dissappeared, it was gone
you are the girl i love, you were the person i was longin
and because of you the darkness has been forgoton
ok the story behind this poem, if you couldnt figure it out is about someone who is slowly getting consumed with the dark (pain,sorrow, etc..) and he puts up barriars and masks so that he could escape it, but it doesnt help then he starts to think of suicide but suddenly a girl appears and brings light back into his life
Kataya 'Free & Feirce'
Mar 26 2007, 11:10 AM
awwwwwwww sam should feel so special even though its not about sam still she should feel special newayz an 10/10 i likey it
Hotagi101
Mar 28 2007, 10:29 AM
woot amber is the only one to reply XD well thxs sis
Hotagi101
May 5 2007, 07:11 PM
IM BACK ok here a little bit of poems i have written i have ALOT ALOT but im just going to post these:
wow:
heh you take my breath away
as love is the music i start to play
ever since i met you, i have found my serenity
and ever since i met you i have grown new enemies
its funny nobody wants to see us together
but my feelings for you are forever
ever since we met we have lost friends
and hell i would do it again
cause i dont care what people say or think
cause our feelings are connected by a hidden link
i have never met you, but i can tell by your voice your sexy and cute
in fact i wish i could turn every other sound on mute
yes im a perv, and so are you haha
but thats what i love about you
your beautiful, caring, sweet, and knows just what to do
i love you, and i dont if you love me to
but my feelings for you will last forever
and your happiness is all i care about, and hurt you i would never
crappy i know XD im no good wit happy poems
no title:(short)
I have been thrown into the dark abyss
its been so long, my life i start to miss
confusion,sorrow,and jealousy
are the friends that keep my company
i threw myself in here, im the one to blame
but yet im happy here, its a shame
ill stay here with my friends
because i dont want to see you pout
cause your happiness is all i care about
no title(short again)
as i sit hear in you heart
i fell as though i have no part
you say you love me, and you want to be with me
and i know i love you, anyone can see
but your being torn by my presence
i have finally got the message
sadly and hurtfull im going to leave
cause your happiness is all that i want to see
DannyL7773
May 5 2007, 07:28 PM
Nice Matt. Although, I don't really like any happy poems
Hotagi101
May 8 2007, 04:26 PM
I know well how do you like this one
The Final Curtain Call:Everyone wiggles in their chair as my tragic play begins
Its not about happiness, its about pain that seems to never end
As my memories start to reply, I watch with emotionaless eyes
As the familiar darkness and suffering, blankets my mind
I sit untouched as i watch my father beat me
It hurt so bad all i could do was cry and scream
I start to laugh maniacally, scaring the crowd
As i look at my dead girlfriend and dont make a sound
God it's been forever since i last shed an emotional tear
I finally stopped when i realized nobody would care or hear
I look around and see the same cold faces that haunted my dreams
That was always a question i couldnt answer, why did they hate me
I settle down not wanting to get hurt like they always did before
As the play morphs to inside of me, like I was an open door
Inside its cold and dark and full of fear but for me its comfortable
My heart is torn to pieces barely alive, and my mind fights endlessly for control
People start murmiring saying that they cant still believe im alive
Now their smiling and starring at me wishing for that death, i cant take anymore i want to hide
Finally the play stops and they start to cheer
My pain and suffering brought them pleasure i can hear
They loved it they want an ecore, again they want to see it all
I bow and smile as i place a gun to my head, no i think it's time for the final curtain call
little hinata
Feb 17 2009, 01:09 PM
I hate final curtain call XD I don't really like you writing poems about suicide lol its a great poem just you draw your poetry from your emotions and someone like you shouldn't have to have the slightest thought about that
but good poem more freestyle than anything it had alot of depth and emotion into it
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