Narrator:there was a young boy named shadow when he was born a 9 tailed fox was released from his father.The father had that demon inside him but the fox was 2 weak 2 break the seal and then all of a sudden the father only had a little bit of chakra left so he seal him in his son.All of a sudden when the fox was seal in the boy the shadow grasp his mother and she was gone.Later on the child wanted 2 become hokage since no1 ever noticed him.He didnt pass the clone test.Then all of a sudden the scrolls of Sand went missing.
Chapter 1 : Battle of Anbu & Genin

Shadow:huf huf huf*

nr16:return the scrolls now shadow ull b punished

shadow: i have learned more jutsu sensai ill show u *shadowclone jutsu**shadowclones make chakra visible in both hands**radori blade shadowblade* *fuse both of them* flare blade*

nr16:amazing u have done a hokage lvl jutsu u have talent

ben: me and my clan have come 2 stop the 1 who stole the scroll

*ben:*sends anbu to stop shadow* but then....

akuda(naruto): shadow u dont have 2 do this *pulls out kunai*

shadow: im srry akuda but *shadowmist* all anbu members disappear ak home.

nr16:shadow stop!!!!

Ice angel: stop this!!!!!

Kisara:watches battle*

Sensai copy: throws genin at tree and kicks akuda*

shadow: flare blade* and attacks sensai copy*

TO b continue......

Chapter2 Pain

Sensai:*dodges attack and uses lightning blade*

shadow:oh s**t!!! thinks 2 himself*comon think fast* i no *sexy jutsu*

Sensai:*drops 2 the fall*

Shadow: wat a pervert now theyll all 4get bout this *mind mirage*

The Next DAY....

shadow:dam im late the chunnin ceromy is gonna start *puts on clothes*

Climax:Now the first match of the jounin is Shadow Uzumaki and Deidara

Deaidara:this will b fun

Shadow: 2 easy

Climax:Begin!

Deidara:*throws shuriken and then fire style dragon flame jutsu*

Chapter 3:WIN OR LOSE? battle 2 the death

shadow:*shadow style shadow pit jutsu*and *weapons dissapear*

Deidara: Summoning Jutsu*

shadow:stop no!!!!! *throws kunai at deidara's hands*blood control jutsu* now i got control of u

Deidara: Twisted Evil no u dont Curse mark seal*

Shadow: i c u wan2 play that way *kyuubi shadow*

Both:*charges at each other*AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH

ice angel: STOP IT NOW!!!!!

crowd:SHUT UP!!!!

shadow:*flare blade*

deidara:*melts all weapons and use it 2 make metal clone*RASENGAN(red rasengan)

Shadow:*flash bak* i will not lose until i become the dam hokage

Deidara:well ur future aint brite *Kicks him in the balls*

Shadow:*poof shadow clone dissapears* ! more time *shadow mist jutsu, flare blade in 1 hand,sand kitana in the other*

Both:*falls 2 the ground*

Shadow:shadow stands up*

Climax:winner Shadow *thinks in head*the kids got guts 2 fite deidara a tuf chunnin with many trix up his sleve but this kid is amazing

genmora: *tells other sand jounins 2 tell the other villages their ready 4 their attack on konoha* KONOHA WILL B CRUSHED

to be continued...

Chapter 4:protecting dads treasure konoha's destruction?

Both:*stands up and tells every1 2 sssssssshhhhhhhhhhhhh8

Deidara:*push shdow out of the way* go the other villages are attckin go help.

Sensai copy and nr16: where do u think ur going shadow?

Shadow:i should have kill u that nite in the forest

Kabuto: *kills all the non shinobi in the stadium*

Ice angel:jumps down 2 help shadow*

Shadow:*mass shadow clone jutsu* Harem jutsu* u perverts

nr16:*grabs one of those sexy shadow clone jutsu (in harem jutsu anyways)

Shadow: like i said u pervert*pulls out kunai and slits his throut*

Sensai copy: s**t that nr was weak anyways

Ice angel:*water style freezing wind jutsu*

Sensai copy: AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH

Shadow: they were both waterfall ninjas so they deserved that so dont cri angel.

Ice angel:*smacks shadow in the bak of the head* U think i no that *frenchkiss*(2 shadow)now lets go protect konoha

Kisara: Cout me in!

T45: me 2

all other shinobi:US 2!

shadow: if u die u wont b able2 have a future so think quick

Every1:no if ur gog were all going

S. jounin SB: If u all r goin ull b needin b

SHadow:ok but u better not slow us down

Kunai is thrown out of no where

sasukemaru: watch out!!! water style water missle jutsu*

Shadow: thx now lets go.

Sasukemaru:*goes 2 the outskirt of konoha*

Every1 else follows

sasukemaru:were all gonna die shadow wat do we do now

500000000 shinobis from other villages attacks all genin and chunnin,jounins,and s. jounins,anbu 2.

Shadow:ill have 2 use all my chakra *shadow,water,& sandclones*

Ice angel: Ill help 2

One of the genin stabs SB with a poison senbon in the a**.

2 b continued...

chapter 5:protectin luved 1s

Shadow:hey SB this isnt the time 2 b sleepin

Ice angel uh,shadow hes dead

Shadow:oh s**t

T45:so wat now?

Kisara:we fite until die....

Deidara:...we die 2 protext konoha and its luved 1s

shadow:then lets go

Sasukemaru:r u crazy well b killed

SB:*tries 2 get up*

Kiasra:ben!!!(u coul tell she likes him)*heals him* u cant get up yet stay there 4 a few more minutes

T45:give it a rest

Shadow:now we have 2 get in groups the village shinobis 2 stop attacking

Kisara:wat do i do?

Shadow: u stay here with SB and inari

inari:but im ready im a genin iwant 2 go now!11

Shadow:im srry but u cant

Jiraiya:wat the f**k r u doin u guys? jus go already b4 i go bak 2 my whorehouse

Shadow:ok ill take sum ppl with me 2 take out sand village

Sasukemaru:ill take my ppl 2 kill sum waterfall a**

SB:*gets up now* the anbu will take out sound village

Jiraiya:theyre all comin from different directions so this will easy 4 konoha if sum of them come this way.

Shadow: i no jiraiya now lets go!

ORO. student:Chops kabutos head off* worthless peice of s**t! to think i wanted 2 have sex with him.(LMAO)

oro student:i sense genins. warn the others sasuke

Tsunade:no u dont *hits him with pure chakra*

oro student: my dad was weak but me i am stronger.

Shadow:*huff huff still attacking* took all the sand jounins and genins out
now jus 2 help the others

Deidara:yea lets go shadow all rite ppl let go

Shadow:u go on first im gonna get help from a old friend.

Deidara: ok

Ice angel:Shadow im comin with u

Shadow: no angel ull get hurt....

shadow:watch out angel!!!!!! *pushes her out of the way* aaaaaaggggggggggghhhhh

Kisara:shadow r u ok?

SHadow:no does it look like im ok 2 u?

Kisara:mayb

Shadow: jus heal me

hidan:still helpin other ppl ay shadow

Shadow:i should have killed u years ago

Deidara: i wonder if shadows ok

Gaara:ill help u out

deidara: gaara thx its been a while hasnt it?

gaara: jus shut up and kill these earthninjas and ill kill the rain! attacks with sand shuriken

tobi:*sword from hell attack*konoha cresent moon dance* *breathing hard* so many jounins

Climax:ill take over from here now tobi *Fire style pheonix flame jutsu*moon blade* water style one horned whale*

tobi:thx

t45:yea thx *windsythe jutsu*

Tobi: watch out t45!!!!

Chapter 6:Akatsuki!

Deidara: so many ninjas and so much chkra wasted

Tobi:f**k i think i got a chakra cramp! (no such thing)

Zetsu:walks over* they have skill and power but they dont no how 2 use it

Tobi:who the hell r u

Sasori:we r and organaztion that looks for power

TObi:power thats wat we need

deidara: yea

Zetsu: u want power then join us Deidara and tobi

Deidara:how do u no our names?

Zetsu:its our job.

Deidara: ok now i will b able 2 eat shadow the next time we meet

uchiha-alia:shut up and move it!

Kisame:pathetic

Chapter 7:Shadow v.s Deidara power of the akatsuki and kyuubi unleashed

Shadow:So many shinobis *huff huff* i think my chakra is almost gone

Iceangel:yea *breathes hard*

T45:so...much shinobis cant stand... up anymore

Deidara:hey shadow *evily*

Shadow:hey deidara nice costume hahaha

Deidara:*throw explding kunai at shadow* now i want a rematch u bastard.

Tobi:Ill watch his friends

Shadow:u f**k ill kill u

deidara:i want 2 c u try

Shadow:thinks 2 himself*i lost 2 much chakra i cant fite him and with so many weapons on him its bad>

Iceangel & T45:*screams*AhAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

SHadow: u ***** ill kill u *kyuunbi shadow*

Deidara: wat is this chakra!!!!

shadow: u hurt my friends ill have 2 kill u *shadowclonejutsu*

Tobi:oh s**t better b careful Dei

Deidara:yea i can c

Shadow:*punches Dei in the face* u ever touch one of my friends ever again ill ikill u

Deidara:bring it *rasengan (red 1)

SB:*stabs tobi in the bak*

Tobi:*pooof*

SB:that was a subsituton

Kisara: wait up sb

to b continued

Chapter 7:the Death of a Friend

Deidara: SB is still alive god dam

SB:so ur the the 1 who stabed me!!

Shadow stay out of my way dont interfere with my battle

Deidara: Intefere and i will kill ur friend

uchiha-alia: now step bak or else

jrod:i will kill u akatsuki u kill my dad *Sharingan* Litning Blade*

Shadow:STOP!!!!!!!!!! THEY WILL KILL U !!!!!!

uchiha-alia: foolish kid *rasengan*

Blood spots everywhere*

T45:*coughs out blood*

Shadow: NO!!!!!!!!!! *Cries* *stops* i told u i will kill u no matter wat rite and nows the time

DEIdara: he chkra is redder tha ever

*All akatsuki members attack shadow*

Shadow: Now u made me mad *stabs all akatsuki members with kunai*

T45:Akuda i luv u.*dies*

Akuda:YYYYYYYYYYYYY I as 2 late.

Shadow: *snaps kisame neck* kome bak here again and i will u akatsuki members

Deidara: still not stong enough*

Shadow: i was 2 late

Jrod: T45.... im srry

*sad ninja song*

Funeral

Shadow thinks 2 himself:First the 3rd now T45 i swear i will b hokage no matter wat even if i haf 2 die 4 it

Angel:its ok shadow i no how u feel we all do

Akuda:yea me 2

SB:we all do but still now that kisara left the village 2 join the village of waterfalls 4 copy shes an outlaw i should have asked her out

Kisara:well srry *****!

Copy:yea shes with me now!

SB:wat the hell r u doin in this village

Both:were in this village now!

SB:after wt happened!!!

shadow:dont wrry they wont b here if they gonna plan another destruction aint that rite Kis?

Kisara: shut up shadow jus like my mom said ur jus like ur dad

Shadow: dont u ever bring my dad into this

Sakura:dont bring my husband into this ill kill u

Kisara:whow do u even know hes ur dad u dont even look like him!

SB:*stabs copy* *****! dont talk bout anybody if u got proof!!! copy is goinin 2 die that senbon is poisoned!

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Shikamaru:i luv u temari

Temari: I luv ya 2

Shikamaru:*takes clothes off* u ready

Temari:always have been *takes her clothes off*

Shikamaru:*sitcks d**k in her vagina*

Temari:*moans and sweats* faster faster!!

*censors*

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Kisara: dam SB

Copy:yea wat a fag

Shadow:sssssshhhhh *2 Iceangel* theyll find out that were here

Angel:ok

Angel:*slips off the ledge* aaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh shadow!!!!!!!!!!!

Shaow:Focus chakra 2 feet* gotcha!!!! ull b ok now.

Iceangel: xD

Embarassed

Shadow: i guess we better go home now angel.

Akuda: hey watcha doim here

Iceangel:nuthing were going home now.

Chapter 8: The Glacier village

shadow:were wat!/!?!??!?!

Yondaime942: were gong on a mission 2 the glaicer village

Ice angel: y?

Shadow:And who is going

Yondaime942: the ppl who r going r Nejigurl,Shadow,Kata-chan7,Nr, akuda,and copy!

sHADOW: ALRITE! who is the squad leader?

Yonda:i will choose shadow

shadow: y me?

Yonda: strong,smart sumtimes anyways,fast, and mostly all of that

Nejigurl:i will b with my nr

SHadow:when were u going out with Nr hahahahaha

Kata chan:shut up shadow

Iceangel: y cant i go!

Akuda: the rest of u guyz arent going because ull b here trying 2 reserrect T45 *seirously*

SB:y cant i go?

----------------------40 mins later------------------

Shadow: so are we ready?

Nejigurl:yea

Kata chan:*puts the sail down*

Pimpinnaruto:dammit shadow ill kill u

Shadow:alrite *throws kunai at pimpin narutos chest*

Shadow:go go go go!

Copy:*ripps rope*

2 days later......

shadow: were here and u better b ready were suppose 2 b savin a princess

Sasukemaru:yea!

Shadow: WTF howd he get on?

Akuda:IDK but hes gotta go

Kisara:no he dont

Copy:f**k this man jus let them go

Neji gurl: the princess name is ice angel angels sister

KAta: so wat do we do

Neji gurl: watch out!!! *pushes her out of the way*

shadow: dam *peircing dragon jutsu*
Akatsuki members again

Kata:*summonin jutsu* summons a giant hawk* every1 get on 1 of us will have 2 stay bak and fite

Nejigurl: i will

Shadow: nejigurl.....

Nejigurl:go!!

Uchiha alia:2 gurls u no i wont b fgoing easy on u rite?

Nejigurl: i wouldnt have it any other way *eight trigrams 128 palms*

Uchiha alia:*coff* good hit *one horn whale jutsu*

Nejigurl:WAT?!?!?!? i hit ur chakra points how!!!

Uchiha alia: kage bushin(shadowclone jutsu)

nejigurl: dammit if i dont think shell kill me rite away i got it!!!!

Nejigurl:*jumps in water*

Uchiha alia:*jumps in 2 *

Nejigurl:*8 trigrams palm rotation* now *8 trigrams 128 palms*

Uchiha alia:AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH cant breath *trys 2 get 2 the suface*

Nejigurl:*pulls her down* I GOTCHA!

Uchiha alia:*stabs her with a kunai in the guts*

Nejigurl:*coffs out blood* phwemlr

To be continued.....

Chapter 9:New members join Konoha

tsunade:So u ppl r from glacier and want 2 join konoha?

kandigurl:yes ma'am

Avk:yea wat bout it?

Kayos: wat a drag.... so much work 2 b done

tsunade: so u r part of a clan 2?

Kayos:yea and its called the...

All:livious clan

tsunade:and y is called that?

All step outside

All:well show u....

Kayos:*Dancing icing blade*grass is all gone and turned into ice*

kandigurl:icestyle*fallen dragon jutsu* hows that

avk:*twin pain ice dragons *no flame jutsu* er thats good rite

gaarasandchik:ive seen better hhahahahhahaha

tsunade: i guess u join *winks at kayos*

Kayos:*embaressed*

Kandigurl:stop flirtin with the hokage

Avk:the main reason i came here is 2 find a team.

Kayos: oh yea team 7

tsunade:there on a mission with sum others

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Nejigurl:*Huff huff* summoning jutsu* so much chkra lost *summons enma*

Enma:ur in trouble again i c

Nejigurl: shut up and go already

Alia:dam

Alia:ill b bak *puts a hole in the ship*

Nejigurl:u can swim cant u?

enma: no.... er bye *poof*

nG:dam i only can do 1 more rotation and thats all
*jumps in water*8 trigrams rotation bulb* idk how long this will hold

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Enma:the kid is so weak lol

Cheif frog:HAHAHAHA not strong enuf 2 beat naruto or shadow

Maudo:ok...

Slug thingy guy:LOL
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NG: i made it but i have 2 stay in this chkra rotation bulb 2 24 hours! well atleast ill b safe

Shadow:itz quiet 2 quiet

Akuda:shut up shadow

Shadow:huh? *looks at akuda* watz the matter

kata:he misses T45

shadow:i no how it feelz akuda me and u r the same ur lonely im not i dont get it u said were the same xD

akuda: yea.... thx...

kata: if she dont c*m bak u can alwayz go out with me

shadow: wat do u ppl c in him itz alwayz akuda this akuda that geez wat bout shadow huh?

kata:shut up shadow

akuda:shut up shadow *grabs kunai*

Shadow:ill walk ok *jumps off giant hawk*

chapter 10:in my fathers footsteps

Shadow:geez i wonder y they hate me so much its always akuda this akuda that geez

kuhame:my father has lost 2 this kid name naruto uzumaki and i wont make a mistake like he did *harpoon jutsu*

Shadow:my dad kicked his dads a**

kuhame:who the hell is there

Shadow: who do u think Shadow Uzumaki the #1 ninja of konoha hahahaha

Kuhame:*Paper bomb blizzard* dont c*m near the princess or il kill u

Shadow:*shadowmist jutsu* 2 late

Kuhame:*exploding frog summoning jutsu*

Shadow: dam *rasengan*
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kata:i wonder if shadow is ok

akuda: shadow is ok after all he is shadow the son of the 6th hokage
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Neji gurl:i got 2 find shadow or else things will get worse

kayos:hell b fine

Kandigurl: after all he is the legendary Chunnin of the leaf village

(shadow: im special lol)

Avk: and when i find him i want 2 batlle him c wat hes made of

nejigurl:dont get 2 cocky shadow is stronger than u think

Avk: i no
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shadow: now tell me where the princess is at

Kuhame:idk

shadow:*punches him in the face* im gonna ask u again where is she?!!?!?

Icemaiden:im rite her but call me macey

shadow:ok then follow me i need 2 tkonoha ur needed there

Macey:ok *flirts with shadow*

shadow:dont flirt with me i already got a gurl

macey:*giggles*sure u do

Shadow:w/e

Macey:*giggles sum more*

Shadow: watz so funny

Macey:watz so funny is meeting a handsum guy like u

Shadow:s*miles* thx but dont try

Macey:*pulls out kunai*

To b continued.....

Chapter 11: Battle in Shadows

Macey:*throws kunai at Hio*

Hio:dam!!!

Shadow:who is he?

macey:sum prince that always wants me 2 marry him

Shadow:wat a pain

Macey:i no

Hio:and who is ur BF

MAcey:hes not my bf

Shadow:dam jus bcause im escortin her doesnt mean im her Bf dam.

Hio:i guess if u dont want 2 b with me ill force u

Shadow:I dont think so

Hio:yea bring it!

Shadow:*shadow mist mist of darkness* stay bhind me macey

Macey:ok

Hio:*niteshot jutsu*

Shadow:AH!!!!!

Macey:wats wrong?

Shadow:He got me sumhow

Macey:niteshot

Shadow:wat

Hio:hehehe ill kill him jus llike i killed all the others(in mind)

macey:its like roushin byakugan but it can c in complete darkness and it will hit u anywhere even chkrapoints

Shadow:dam i never had 2 u this move *shadowgrasp jutsu*(shadows comsume him)

Hio:Not good *niteshade control*

shadow:wtf howd he do that

MAcey:shadow if i die i want 2 let u no i luv u

Shadow:thats great an all but this is a battle

Macey:kiss me.

Shadow:wat no i told u alrea.....

Macey:*kisses shadow*

Shadow:wtf man geez Rolling Eyes

Macey: Very Happy

Shadow:ok thats great but im in a battle *shadowblade*

Hio:shadowblade ay!*shadowsword*

Blades colide

Macey:nice nowing u shadow *8 blade 99 points*

shadow:Dam *poof*

Macey:shadowclone dam

Hio:good try though MAcey!

Shadow:gangin me nice try

shadow:*Multiple Shadowclone jutsu*

macey:bastard

Shadow:1/4 of clone *rasengan*another 1/4 radori
1/4 Flare blade 1/4 radoriblade*

Macey:Dam *got hit every*

Hio:oh s**t!!!! *dodges all attacks xcept1* aaaaaaaahhhhh *blown away*

shadow: ur lucky i wasnt in kyuubi mode *huff huff and falls down*

Akuda:*catches* I got u shadow u did well

Macey:*grunts and tries 2 get up* dam shadow

Shadow:*cough* dam *****

akuda:i got it*slaps her* where is the real princess!

Macey: in tha catsle.... *blacks out*

kata:shadow is lucky he alwayz gets 2 battle the strongest ppl

Shadow:Kata chan c*m closer

Kata:leans closer

Shadow:***** ur lucky *coughs*

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Kandi:so where r they

Avk:*snow compus* theyre north

Kayos:*summoning jutsu* lets move faster *giant snow bird*

Nejigurl:whoa

Avk:jus move it
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shadow:wakes up 5 hours later

Avk:wake up *puls Kunai and tries 2 stab*

Shadow:*rolls over* who r u

Kandi:im kandi

Shadow:safj;l;swjf i mean im shadow

Kandi:pathetic

shadow:srry i was amazed by ur beauty

Kandi:awwww thats so sweet no1 ever said that 2 me b4

Iceangel:*smacks shadow* aahemm!!!

Shadow:oh angel r u ok

Iceangel:im ok

Shadow:yea so r u

kandi:were the livous clan

Shadow:why r u called that

kayos:because were luxurious and visicous

Shadow:wheres ur chakra armor

Avk:shadow outside now

Shadow:another battle sweet

to be continued..........

Chapter 12: Shadow v.s Ice

shadow:so u ready im not gonna go easy on u

Akuda i want in

Avk:its only me and shadow

Shadow: let him i alwayz wanted 2 battle Akuda

Akuda: if ya die dont blame me

Shadow:u guyz think itz gonna b easy since im a bad chunnin dont u

Avk:shut up and do it *attacks starting off with taijutsu*

Akuda:*drunken fist style*

Shadow:sum s**t will never change will it always attack me first *dodge* sand blister*

akuda:AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH *stabs self 2 stop illusion*

Avk:Fire fire AAAAAAHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!*is stuck in pain*

Shadow:*rasengan*

Akuda:is this how it feels like 2 b beaten no i wont let my mom down!!!!!! *curse mark seal*

Shadow:Curse mark seal ay ill stay like this 4 awhile

Avk:*Ice demon of the glaciers*

SHadow:2 demons comon

Akuda:ill kill u shadow

Shadow:kill?

Avk:man i will kill u shadow ur father killed my dreams,village,home,and gurl!

Shadow:that was the past let it go

Avk:nO!!!!!!!!!!!

Akuda:*claws of the demon*

Shadow:*dodges but still bleeds* wat the f**k

Avk: its from the claws its sound village material 2

Akuda:***** c*m near me and face the conciquences

Shadow:follow my heart and blieve it!!*SHADOW CLONE JUTSU*Shadow chronicles

Shadow:chapter1 uzumaki barrge chapter 2 shadow rendan chapter 3 shadows rising dragon chapter 4 Spirit of the beat Final chapter 5 rasengan (beatdown)

Avk and akuda:*grunts and tries 2 get up*

shadow:if u want a beat down jus call me

Avk:i guess ur rite shadow thats just the past

shadow:will u jus try 2 restore ur village

Avk:yea

Akuda:shadow ur stronger than b4

Shadow:akuda y did u want 2 fite me

Akuda:2 c if i was strong enuf 2 beat Aster

Shadow:if u want 2 beat train then mayb u will b able 2 beat him

Akuda:thx shadow 4 the advice

Kayos: 1 chunnin took down 2 special jounins man he must b that strong

Shadow:the legendary chunnin of the leaf village konohas greatest chunnin YEA!!!!!!!!! BELIEVE IT!!!
WHen i become hokage i will b a great hokage jus like my dad and the others

this fanfics a little difficult to follow, i had to read the first part twice to understand what was going on. but the plots got potential, so i just sugest rewriting it with a little more discription to fit with the dialogue, but i like the naruto's son idea, you just need to fine tune the writing.

there i commented on yours, read my fic now

yea srry bout that i should really put it in chapter by chapter and ok i will

yea this is gay so anny mod or admins c this lock this

I'm gay and so is this 456529t459646opic
I like vaginas