oke here we go tell me what ya think. Be honest i can take it LOL

Kakashi sensei asked Naruto, WHAT HAPPENED TO Asuma in a shaken and disturbing voice. Kakashi replied that two Akatsuki members killed him while trying to retrieve Chiruku’s body. No sooner did Kakashi say those words that Naruto began to clench his fist in utter anger. Naruto begins to cry as though he can not believe a friend and possible teacher is no longer. He looks up at Kakashi and tells him that he will need some time to reflect on this current event. Kakashi looks at Naruto in bewilderment. Naruto, Kakashi says, don’t do anything yet The FITH has sent out a team to deal with this we must resume your training. I can’t replies Naruto, I can’t. Kakashi sensei, I can no longer be the boy who is afraid, I must become the man who will become the best Hokage ever. With those words Naruto sped off in a flash towards the Fifth’s House. Kakashi lowers his head in sadness as he realizes that Naruto might do something stupid and he too leaves in a flash to Tsunade Sama. Tsunade Sama has her head in her hands thinking how such a terrible thing has happened and begins to worry about Naruto. Just then Sunade enters and tells her that Kakashi is here to see her. Tsunade looks up and tells Kakashi to come in. Kakashi explains to her the brief conversation with Naruto and she becomes angry and smashes her desk with no after thought, yelling for Sunade to come. Sunade enters and sees the destruction and knows well that she needs to do as asked. Tsunade orders that Naruto be brought before her immediately and Sunade runs out to give the orders. Kakashi takes his leave to search for Naruto in Konoha. Meanwhile as word has spread everyone is looking for Naruto and Hinata is using her byakugan searching for him, when she sees him out in the woods. She hastily runs to him with concern and passion. Naruto Kun Hinata whispers, Naruto hears her but pays no attention to her as he reads from a scroll. Naruto Kun please Hinata says again in a louder tone. Naruto turns to her with fiery red eyes and mumbles in a terrifying voice that he will not forgive them. He turns back and reads from the scroll. Hinata now fearful that Naruto is doing something he should not she approaches him. Naruto tells her she must leave that this is going to become dangerous and he doesn’t want her hurt. She still approaches and he turns to her LEAVE NOW HINATA as his face is now in full view. She stops and begins to tremble as she sees his face demonic in nature with eyes that can kill. The air full of hate so powerful it is thick and hard to breath, Naruto kun please, please don’t do this I and at that moment Kakashi and Yamato show up and immediately know that Kuybi is beginning to take over. Yamato begins his jutsu but Naruto grabs the scroll and leaves. Kakashi sees the scroll only for a bit, but knows that it is the forbidden scroll and chases after him immediately. He yells to Hinata inform The Fifth that Naruto has the forbidden scroll. With a look of utter sadness she dose as he requests. Kakashi and Yamato chase after Naruto but are begining to loose his trail quickly as it seems Naruto is traveling way to fast for them to catch up. Yamato says in a worrying voice that if he goes any further the Kyubu will be released and Naruto will die. Kakashi stops and summons Pakkun and the pack to chase the scent of Naruto. Naruto in a flashing blaze runs faster and faster through the forest for what seems like a day. He begins to drift into his mind as though he is on auto pilot. He sees himself in a dark place, a familiar place where the Kyubi lives. He yells demon come I want to talk to you. Two glowing red eyes emerge behind the sealed gate. AH so you have come, what do you want now little one, you know it only time now before I consume you? Naruto looks at him and says I don’t think so demon fox I am stronger then you I am the great Hokage, even greater then the fourth who put you here. The Kyubi begins to laugh at Naruto as though he could never be that powerful. Naruto looks with eyes of power and confidence directly into the eyes of the Kyubi and says, you damn fox this is all your fault and I am done playing games with you, they want you for some evil purpose and I will not allow them to have you. With that last word Naruto begins to glow with a bluish green aura. The Kyubi looks at Naruto and can sense the immense power coming from him. Fox, yells Naruto I am going to end this now I am going to free you from your prison forever and with those words NARUTO BEGINS TO SUMMON A BALL IN THE PALM OF HIS HAND. The fox yells nooooo you will kill us both foolish child, but Naruto continues to summon the NADAMA SPHERE. The fox begins to rant on to Naruto that only seems to pass trough wooden ears. Finally the sphere is formed and Naruto begins to walk towards the Kyubi. Don’t if I die you die pleads the Kyubi once again, in reply Naruto says, I have realized that I have far more power than you can ever have you damn fox. I will not allow the Akatsuki to ever get a hold of you. The Kyubi says fine but that boy, you know that boy who was here I know what he has inside of him. Naruto stops, what did you say? I said I know what that boys is, the one who came here before. Naruto says Saske you know about Saske? Yes boy he is none other then Madara Uchiha. You can not defeat him alone he has more power then I and is far more evil then me. No I don’t believe you Naruto says you lie you lie. No boy, I do not. He is far more evil then I, we have crossed paths before in another lifetime and he is more powerful then you can imagine. You need me to defeat him. Naruto releases the sphere and begins to kneel, I can’t believe that Saske is evil, no; no I will save him I promised Sakura I would bring him back. He begins to think upon Sakura of how devastating it would be if she knew. Then fox you will live and you will tell me everything you know about this Madara Uchiha. At that moment Naruto wakes up to find himself within the woods. He is carrying the forbidden scroll and begins to read it once more. Kakashi and Yamato follow Pakkun and the dogs until they stop. What’s wrong Pakkun asks Kakashi, I lost him, his scent is gone? What screams Kakashi that can’t be? I’m sorry Kakashi but his scent is no longer here he is gone. Kakashi searches the area but no trace can be found. This is very bad Kakashi we must inform the Fifth immediately. Right lets head back quickly. After informing the Fifth Hinata went to her father to talk with him. Yes Hinata what do you need, excuse me father but I need to speak with you privately. Hinata what’s wrong? Her father asks. I am worried about Naruto father, he looked strange. Hinata you like this boy don’t you he asked sternly. Hinata began to blush and replied yes father I do like but he looked like he was possessed. Her father sighed, Hinata I love you I really do and I know that you are strong and I really push you but you must know that that boy is the demon fox. He had it sealed into him by the fourth and can be a dangerous person. FATHER NO replied Hinata he can’t be I Hinata I know I have always known. Hinata looked at her father while tears began to run down her face father I love him. I have always loved him. It will be ok my daughter they will find him and bring him back. Father I must go look for him. I know you have grown my daughter, go and find your love. She kissed her father and left in a streak of haste to ward the forest. Hinata begins to daydream about what her father said about growing. I will find you my love as her inner self begins to strengthen I will tell you I love you. Meanwhile at the Hokage’s office the news is disturbing as reports come in from Kakashi and Yamato about loosing Naruto. No one else seems to know where he is either and the Fifth plops down in her seat with her hands on her temples. Kakashi I have a bad feeling about this, do what you must but I want that scroll back here immediately and Naruto with it, take five others and go now. Yamato you will be prepared for the Kyubi if it comes to that no go. With those orders they set out to get the team together. Sakura, yells Tsunade. Yes mistress Tsunade I know you have herded where is he? I don’t know mistress but I am worried replied Sakura. Go with Kakashi and Yamato maybe you can help. Yes maam, and off she went. Breath Naruto begins to think. Calm, yes that’s better ok. I need to think I must find some shelter. Naruto begins to search for shelter and happens upon a cave. Great I think this will be ok might as well check it out. He enters a dark cave and waits for his eyes to adjust before going any further. Wow he thinks this is a pretty big cave and grabs a kunai and heads in deeper. While using her byakugan Hinata’s feelings come to her in a rush thinking he might be dead and speeds up her movement even faster. Naruto goes deep into the cave following the passages. He stumbles into an area that had one time been inhabited. He cautiously enters and looks around. It seems to be laden with all sorts of supplies. From the looks of things he can tell it has been here for a long time. He finds a lantern and lights it looks around a bit more then rummages though the items left behind. Meanwhile, Hinata sees an image of someone inside a cave and heads toward it. She peers deeper and discerns it is none other then her beloved and heads in to him. Kakashi and Yamato have now secured Neji, Lee Gai Sakura Kiba and Shino. Ok let’s head out we need to find him immediately. Gai says with the spirit of youth lets go, and off they went. Naruto takes out the scroll and begins to study from it. Hinata walk in and says Naruto stop in a loud tone. He looks up and says Hinata, what are you doing here? She replies I am here to take you back and that scroll too.



ok i know i am not a writter but this is where he can reflect back about all his missions and Hinata can confess her love hehe

Yeah, it's kinda nice, really, the concept. And so I roughly beta-ed a part (it's in the spoiler). >_> Would you like me to continue editing it?

Much better then i could ever write. I am what they call an inspire not a writer hehehe.
I would love for you to continue its good. What i am doing here is trying to portray what Naruto is capable of and show how all those filler episodes can easily be tied in as well as Hinata's love for him wich i am working on now. this is very good and much better in format of course. Please by ll means continue. Also replies folks i want to see where we can take this, i want honest critism? hehe can't spell either lol

Okies here is the next section. It will be interesting to see how you can improve on this and if so i would love to make a team effort on this.



Naruto, you must come with me. Tsunade Sama orders you to come home and bring the scroll as well its dangerous. Hinata, Naruto replied I cannot do what you ask. Do you know how it feels to be hated, sneered at and thought of as an idiot? Just then Naruto begins to sign and vanishes in a blink of an eye. Hinata looks in amassment but Naruto in no where to be found. He whispers from behind her, well Hinata do you? She gasps in surprise as he is now behind her. He strikes quickly knocking her unconscious mumbling I’m sorry Hinata but I am not ready yet. She falls as though it was slow motion towards the ground hearing those words she begins to drift into unconsciousness. Naruto places her on the bed and resumes his studying of the scroll. REFLECTION? Naruto’s mind says as what he reads becomes more puzzling. Ok well lets begin and he puts himself into his mind focusing on all he has accomplished. That day, yes that day is when this all started with Mizuki yes I remember. Steadily he begins to remember each of his missions and evaluates each one of what he has learned. I see as he speaks loudly. All this time I thought they were meaningless when all this time they where about leadership and teamwork. Hinata, you have always been there, haven’t you Naruto asks Hinata. Yes Naruto Kun, I have always been there watching you. Arising from the bed she looks at him with care and lust, I always will be there for you. I, Hinata stop I now know what you are going to say. She lowers her head and begins to blush, but Naruto Kun I love you as she mumbles quietly. Meanwhile Kakashi’s team is steadfast on finding Naruto. Through the forest they go ever valiantly toward’s their goal. Pakkun turns to Kakashi and says he has picked up naruto’s scent. Kiba looks at Pakkun in amassment as he nor Akamaru dose not sense it. Go Pakkun says Kakashi hurry, as they begin to pick up there pace. Naruto rolls up the scroll and hands it to Hinata. Here take this back to Granny Tsunade and tell her that I am resuming my training. If she wishes to speak with me then come back here and let me know. This cave Hinata, it use to belong to the fourth. Her eyes open wide Naruto she replies I am concerned about you. You have nothing to worry about Hinata, I know what must be done now. And with those words he begins to form seals and turns his hand towards Hinata and she disappears in puff of smoke. I love you too Hinata I just never realized it. He moves towards the cave entrance, just as Kakashi’s team arrives. Naruto, yells Kakashi what are you doing? I am fulfilling my destiny Kakashi Sensei and with those words he begins to form seals once again. Naruto what are you doing? Asks Kakashi. I am sending them back to Konoha so we can resume our training. And the rest of team Kakashi disappears in a puff of smoke. Kakashi looks at Yamato who has a look of utter bewilderment upon his face. That’s the Fourths technique. Yes Naruto replies, it is. Please come in so I may catch you up on the current situation. They enter the cave. Hinata stunned at what has just happened comes to her senses as the rest of team Kakashi appears near her. Gai shouts to Hinata. She turns to see them and states she must get to Tsunade Sama”s rite away. She departs towards the Fifth’s immediately carrying her valuable cargo. She arrives with her escorts to Tsunade Sama. She then tells The Hokage what has transpired and Tsunade tells her she is to have no further contact with Naruto and is dismissed. Gai Tsunade Sama says you will go back to the cave and tell Kakashi I want a full report on the current situation. Yes he replies and off he goes. The rest of you are to resume your current missions. Aye says the rest of the group and leave to resume there missions. Mistress says Sakura, I am worried about Naruto. No need to worry Tsunade replies it is his fate as she places the scroll in a safe place. It seems the time has come for him to prove his worth.

and here is some more.

Upon leaving The Fith’s office Hinata went to find her sensei. Kurenai Sensei, yes Hinata what can I do for you? Kurenai replied. I want you to train with me Sensei please. Hinata I would love to help you with your training, come let’s go. Mistress will you help me with some training, asked Sakura. Tsunade looks at her and replies so you think you are ready? Sakura snaps to attention and replies yes mistress. Shizune yells Tsunade and the young girl rushes in. Take Sakura to the training ground and show her the Technique. Whaat exclaims Shizune but, No buts Shizune show Sakura that technique. Yes Hokage Sama replied Shizune. Off the two girls went to the training grounds. Gai has reached the cave and enters to find the trio deep into meditation. Oh says Gai I see and sits down and he too begins to meditate. When Gai reaches his relaxation point he now sees the trio as though he was standing with them. Ah what is this Kakashi hmmm asks Gai . Kakashi replies that this is not my doing but Naruto. Ehhhh he exclaims, Naruto looks at Gai and tells him this is a technique used by the fourth to train. I see Gai replies then this is how he was able to do those things. Naruto begins to explain what he has learned and shows the three Sensei’s new techniques. Sensei’s I hope this will be enough to defeat the Akasuki but I am afraid we must train harder to help Saske. And with those words he explains what has happened to Saske and informs Kakashi that once Saske deafeats Itachi Saske will become the full blow form of Madara Uchia. It seems the demon fox has come across the path a Madara once before and learned some secrets of his while fighting but the fox’s power is not compared to that of Madara. Meanwhile team 10 is on their mission to find the 2 Akatsuki members to bring them to justice. Shikamaru reveals to Ino and Choji his plans to capture the two. Gai has returned to Tsunade Sama and has reported in on the situation with Naruto. She looks with concern as the name Madara is mentioned and summons for the Hyuuga leader. Gai request that he begiuns training immediately and is dismissed by Tsunade. Gai gathers his team and tells them some information and begins to train his team. So the Akatsuki leader says, we have the second and first Jinchuuriki and the third is close at hand. Bring the third here so we can perform the ritual all is going to plan. Itachi what of the fox? He has disapeard Itachi responds. In disappointment the leader says you must find him. Go and be ready to come back for the ritual we will call you when the time comes. Yes he replies and off they go to find the fox. The battle begins as Zetsu corners the Jinchuuriki.

Okay, lemme see what I can do with those. *wink* Just give me a bit more time 'kay? I'll edit this when I'm done. ^___~






Aaaah... gomen, I'll find more time!!! ^^"

its all good. I have actually started to rewrite some of this changing a few things around and given it a lil more detail soon as a opportunity arises that is lol. anyway i'm glad someone who can follow along and is willing to help is here. I hope that together we can get all this outa my head been driving me nuts dreaming about this stuff hehehe.

nice work